I enjoyed the story and wouldn't have guessed about a mermaid, except that the picture hinted we might see one at some point. I figured Justin's mom would play a part, but you kept me guessing until the reveal!
Hey, fun story Matt! I liked it. It was well-written and an easy read.
As far as some constructive criticism goes, had you not told me it was about mermaids, I never would have known. Just reading the story, I would have thought it was about death or ghosts. I also think it was a bit slow in getting to the subject matter. Granted, I know you had very limited words to work with and it's tough to get the point across within those constraints.
Whoah, Matt - you GOT me with that ending! Great story which then turned really chilling (but still great) at the end there! :D
I enjoyed the story and wouldn't have guessed about a mermaid, except that the picture hinted we might see one at some point. I figured Justin's mom would play a part, but you kept me guessing until the reveal!
Hey, fun story Matt! I liked it. It was well-written and an easy read.
As far as some constructive criticism goes, had you not told me it was about mermaids, I never would have known. Just reading the story, I would have thought it was about death or ghosts. I also think it was a bit slow in getting to the subject matter. Granted, I know you had very limited words to work with and it's tough to get the point across within those constraints.
Like I said, though, all in all, a great job!